And like the WORLD IS LITERALLY ending and the first thing on their mind is "oh, we need to tell her friends RIGHT now how terrible she is and how she hurt us so they can know the REAL her and know how awful she actually is" And the scions shut that shit down IMMEDIATELY

#ocnayzak

And idk it's cathartic for me to think about Thancred being a wall between them, and just for the first time, Nayzak doesn't have to doubt reality in their presence because her friends are there to validate the fact that they are actually shitty and her feelings were real and warranted

#ocnayzak

A bit of a venty gpose, but I rly wanna explore that trauma through fanfic a lot more when my brain returns to my body. How she's buried the trauma since leaving Garlemald and how she's actually forced to confront her mother and father in Garlemald during the Final Days

#ocnayzak

Surely there aren't (normal) adults who find this hot? And the author certainly isn't advertising to teenagers. So again I ask: Who is this for???

So I'm sitting thinking "ok 22.... that's not so bad"

Then the story is like "they're preparing for university" and I think, so maybe 18? Not super comfortable but they're young adults, surely.

And then like 200ish pages in they drop that one of the girls is 17?? Guys what are we doing??????

And before anyone thinks, "well maybe they were of age or adults" I THOUGHT THE SAME. I thought maybe this is like some prestigious university and they're college students actually. They've been rivals for 10 years the book says and their rivalry started in middle school

Honestly did not even get to like the "meat and potatoes" of it, being the smut which the author heavily advertised (while glossing over the other aspects of the book) and I'm not even interested. Again. Teenagers. And the story SOUNDS like it was written by a teenager, too? such an ick honestly.

And AND the narration is so heavy handed and clearly a product of like internet culture where everyone feels the need to over explain themselves and their intentions lest some dumbass who lacks reading comprehension accuse them of being an anti anti or whatever the fuck

Zero effort made to craft a storyline that's worth reading that endears the leads to you, so you kinda just find yourself skimming through the text going "ok I'm here for the smut honestly, I don't care about these side characters and nonsense"

Like it's definitely meant to capitalize on the Haley Stardew Valley mean girl who secretly likes girls hype. But the mean girl is like.............. so irritating and juvenile and like her motivation doesn't make sense. She's rich and manipulative and genuinely cruel.

Also it's a smutty novel but the leads are 17 and 18??? Who is this for? Why does anyone want to read a smutty novel about high schoolers. I do not care about the sex lives of teenagers. It's advertised as enemies to lovers but lacks any kind of believable conflict

And like listen this is not to disparage wattpad authors -- I've used the platform myself. But like.... this is missing what SHOULD distinguish a project written and approved and proofread by one person in their bedroom in their free time and a published work

Dooo it 👀 embrace the Raha love 🫶