Well… I drove all the way from California and Ann flew in from Texas… so that is both a tour and the closet thing to the country uniting under one cause… so wins all around.

Thanks for letting me be part of your tour! You are amazing.

That’s awesome. I looked at you pitch for Blacksmith’s rebellion. Sounds badass. Good luck man. My dm’s are always open if you need anything.

Beta readers are so important. My wife is a far superior writer than I am, so she is my go to. I think you should surround yourself with people willing to tell you no. If I’m the smartest man in the room… I’m in the wrong room. I can’t wait for you to get published

But think of Luke… we don’t need to know the history of Tattooine. It’s not relevant. All we need to know is Luke hates sand and wants to become a pilot like his dad was. It wouldn’t matter if the planet was covered in water… doesn’t change the story. So start there… you will figure it out.

Why are you describing the fabric count of napkins on the table? Unless those napkins will come back as the murder weapon, you don’t need it. Most over-writing comes from your creative mind wanting to set the scene or a history lesson.

No problem. I’m an animation writer and book author. In animation we are often forced to streamline because every frame = more money. Same thing should be with books. If it’s not serving a purpose (I.e. plot point, pacing, or character development) then it doesn’t need to be there.

I want to give you my opinion on this. Take it or leave it. I’d suggest using the hero’s journey to see where your story beats land. Think of starwars… new hope Luke goes through the heroes journey… but the full character arc isn’t told. Then ask do I need this to get to the next plot point?

Ahahhahahahahahaha… oh man if you knew how much money Ann and Tobias have made me your head would explode. I’m sorry that your only writing outlet is trolling book agents online… but if anyone else reads this reply. Ann is the best and I owe all my success to her.

The pleasure was all mine. Your son is wonderful and it’s kids like him that keep us writing and gives us hope for the future.

By telling someone you have a great idea for a novel.

Terrible student. Pretty good kid.